greymachine

As other people have stated it's a wonderful poem, and I find no grammatical errors to nit pick about. Beautiful poem with beautiful words.

I feel that I was able to grasp the emotion in this poem, but on the other hand I had to give it a bit of thought. Overall it was ...

The dark imagery was intriguing and i was genuinely impressed. Nice work..

I think this could have been short and sweet, or a few more metaphors thrown in to bring it to life, but nice work.. 6/10

It's not bad, I wish it could have been a little longer with a stronger emphasis towards detail, but the imagery was simple,but due to a lack of detail the ...

Pacing aimlessly with my feet bound through a dispiriting ocean floor The turbulent wave's above crack and whip While my thought's dash and slip The world heavy above with worldly ...

I enjoyed this, despite the fact your title of choice share's a name with a song I don't personally like. But that's irrelevant keep up the goodwork!!