graesch666

So, is this going to be the very beginning of some larger story, as I believe you said ? If it really is the case, then, maybe, you should try ...

Sad, truly. It began so well, so promising. And then this sentence, arriving like the yelling of an alarm clock waking you out of an erotic dream : "Because God ...

Alas, I'm always incapable of making a helpful and pertinent critique when I love something. Thus, my only words will be : I want to read what comes next. And ...

I read it. Then I took the time to chew on it. Then I read it again, so as to attempt to grasp it better. Unsuccessfully. I'm usually fond of ...

Well, I think it's a bit of a pity that you don't add the stage direction directly, but your story grabed my attention though. I can't judge the whole play ...

Very touching, but I'm just wondering : is the guy actually blind ? I understood it that way because of the very end : "I turn and find that his ...

I totally agree with Lexi. The feeble end spoils the whole script. That's really frustrating. I mean, it should end there : Jamie: Now this explains why the car key ...