goatgirl

This poem is absolutely amazing! I liked the way you used the crying child to add a personal aspect for the reader, which made it gain in interest and emotion. ...

This is amazing! It makes what has happened really clear without actually narrating the scene. I feel bad just putting good comments, but I can't really think of much you ...

This is a moving piece which must have been hard to write. Perhaps doing it non-rhyming would have been better as it gives you more freedom - I find less ...

This was really good - I like the way you don't tell the reader much about what's going on! You've got a bit of repetition in the first paragraph (the ...