gateway88

Hi :) So, I'm going to jump straight in! I liked the opening paragraph- I didn't necessarily understand all the terms used, but I think that by using them in ...

Hi! So, I'm going to jump right in. Firstly, I liked your opening paragraph, however, I thought that your first line could do with a little work. The first line ...

Hi :) So, firstly I thought that your story has some great potential; I really enjoy the casual way that you write and the simplicity of the narrative. You don't ...

So, hi :) I liked your starting sentence, but as you began your first paragraph, it became a bit word-y and it became a little bit confusing. "Totally unreal" sounds ...

Hi, I think that you've chosen a really unusual piece of history to write about, something that you can make really unique and individual. I think that your writing has ...

Hi, I thought that you chose an interesting time in history to base your writing on, and I thought that you wrote really effectively and that your vocabulary choices suited ...

My first impressions of your writing is that it is a very unique storyline and that both the plot and the characters have lots of potential :smt001 However, I thought ...