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Marlene scooted in between Jordan and Slade in the backseat as Kathy reved up the car and Bill sat in passenger. "Everyone good to go?" Kathy asked. They all nodded, ...

(OOC: yeah)

(OOC: Darn! You're right. How could I have forgotten that? I edited. Is that better?)

"Well, you scared me! Ever since your dad-" Lily stopped, wondering if she should continue. She decided against it. Her friend was already feeling bad enough. "Anyway, I'm just glad ...

Lily called again. She was starting to get concerned about her friend. She had been acting weird lately. (OOC: Are we letting this story die?)

"Wait," Kelsey said, her eyes watching a figure as it moved behind the trees. The others stopped. "We have a trespasser." (OOC: Trying to get the plot moving for you ...

Marlene smiled, pulling out her gun and shooting one of the zombies in the leg. Looking back at the others, she ran to the downstairs bathroom for shelter. She watched ...

I don't want this to sound rude, but you can't just accept a critique can you?

"Hey! I like what I'm wearing," Marlene said, blushing. "Anyway, where exactly do you expect us to go?"

Maybe you could edit your post and just leave the scene with Hermione, then we'll add in the plot later. I'll be Ginny.

Hey Miles, do you mind if I start this, and then we can add your plot in little by little as people start posting?

I don't think you have to know that much about it. I don't. I just treat it like fiction and make things up as I go, with a few tips ...

Maybe instead, we should just let everyone pick a character from HP and we can do our own version of DH?

Hey, Miles, I have to agree. ;) But once you shorten it up, I'm so joining, girl.

Marlene smiled, feeling a lot safer. She usually wasn't frightened easily. Things popping out at you and startling you was another thing. She linked her arm with Jordan's as they ...