franz6767

I agree with the What Happened comment above, b/c it made it longer, when some of it seems to be unnecessary repetition, meaning the repetition didn't convey that emotional impact ...

I thought the flow of the poem was okay, and the idea was good, but I felt you could have written it a lot better. "I watch as the stub ...

"This room wasn’t giving me time." This line didn't fit in well to me "For many moments I lay, Eyes shut so tight That I couldn’t even feel The pain. ...

A little fact of life went wrong, A little fact, but its grip was strong. There were two stanzas that I thought killed the overall flow of the poem this ...

Don't look back; don't tarry dear, you have no need to weep or fear the winged beasts of dark and gloom who close the hinges of your tomb. This stanza ...