foxfire

The plot is somewhat fast pace especially at the end part of the story and it feels that it quickly reveals to the reader what has happen. Usually a short ...

funeral the sky was covered in dark depressing clouds. you could tell why it is dark by giving some details... away to the real world. A world where she was ...

moonlight, Theo Theo Theo Theo Theo. I let my eyes close in peacefulness try to put comma between them Overall this is a reasonable story though I felt that when ...

hi...! i hope my comment is not a repetition of the former He opened his eyes wide with fear and screamed. comma between, "wide with fear" He screamed again and ...

receptionist greeted me. As I walked in from the blustery New Haven weathe no need to seperate them with a period. How's little Genevieve?” she asked handing me my messages. ...

wow...very detailed and original...*reminds of of elfen lied) plot the story was interesting and the first sentence grip the reader's attention which was good. The detail as well on her ...

bigger i think you need to change the word rather than repeating bigger As he shook Eddie’s hand he had given a brief glance comma between hand and he body, ...

hey, pudin...i hope i'm not to late! Wow, pudin…I never imagined you making a sadistic almost human worship story like this. It kind of surprise me that you actually wrote ...

HEY...PUDIN...here's the review overall, the story is good. I like it. It introduces not only the personality of thereader but also of her bodily features particularly the one at the ...

hi...i got your message, sure thing...i'll review your work. but first...the word "buzz" should be replaced by "buzzing" okay...firstly, characters i've read it and i saw that you made interesting ...

okay...i am reading catching fire at the moment and to be honest for me personally...there was not a bit of action on the book... and maybe becasue that i am ...

okay...the plot of the story is good but it seemed confusing. for example...where is the setting located, when i first read it, it seemed like in her house or in ...

this is a really good autobibnliography...and it is good.... what you did great was making a character known as the girl and you were able to engage the reader by ...

i might call it a little miracle. this is a really interesting piece of work you had posted here and i agree with what you said. Whenever people pray they ...

i agree with what alecmoran say about callum wherein you first introduce him then headed off to a different perspective. It almost seems that these are two different events. What ...