fireheartedkaratepup

A young girl, with eager blue eyes and wavy blond hair, stared at one of her classmates impatiently. "It's... Good, Lisa," her classmate replied. The young girl, Lisa, frowned slightly. ...

Aha, here's something. In the first stanza you were referring to the person you're listening to as "her", and now suddenly she's "you". I would fix this. That threw me ...