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yeah there is certain unnameable thing about this story that just make it work. Your writing style is incredible and keeps me interested enough to want more!! Great Job!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

I like this prologue, it reminds me of a prologue in a book right before they cut to the epic battle or whats happening modern day, kinda like what you ...

I don't care about misspelled words or grammar unless it prevents me from understanding the story and you have no such problems there. Don't worry abouit having every last detail ...

I really liked this piece, the main character is more of a narrator than actually involved in the story in my opinion but hell your the author and you can ...

I hope you are adding more because what I've seen so far was excellent and has piqued my interests. Of course the others caught a few grammar and speeling problems ...

I liked this chapter but again there are some problems in here that have already been mentioned, but what i think you should do is finish the story as a ...

yeah i agree with everyone else, kinda i do believe you should have a chapter about whats happening with those who care about the lead character and what they are ...

I agree with Azila the basic plot of your story is solid but has a few holes in it, but I think you could remedy that easily. Well everyone else ...

Switching point of veiws was a good thing but only if oyu countinue with it, because if you didn't then it would be weird. The whole no women thing is ...

Hey I just wrote this off the top of my head and I would like critiquers to help me with comma placement because I'm not very good at that, so ...

Thank you for the critiques everyone, and don't worry about getting to harsh on me, I take constructive criticism well. :lol:

Again fast but in a slower way, but don't change your writing style cause it might ruin the story. There were some errors int he story where you forgot or ...

I like this story so far, but it still seems a little rushed but hey its yourt writing style. Umm, i like your descriptions but all character interactions bug me ...

I thought it was just the right length for a chapter in a book. The dragon was introduced a little fast but i think you kind of pulled it off. ...

His river of muscles ripple with each motion Drinking in eyes like an entrancing potion A soft caress from rough skin Being in his arms feels like a lovely sin ...