fight4whatisright

Hi i haven't heard "Waltz for a night" but i'll do my best to reveiw your lyrics anyway. this was good and sweet and all but it lacked the general ...

Write because you must A great ability thrust Upon you like a trust That cannot be broken

im... speachless. wow. i LOVED it!!! Please take it close to your heart - I’m really happy we’re alive. Always ready for a new start, I couldn’t ask for more ...

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wow the story line is one commonly used but you truly made it your own in this piece :D She stands in the rain waiting for the bus her tears ...

hey this was cool Looking at you r teary eyes Delightful, your tears are gone Together we fly and break free Deceit and lies, all now gone, Content to run, ...

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whoa! cool. i'm not a fan of info dumps but this was really interesting and is necessary to set the scene. i noticed something strange. at the end of each ...

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wow this was really cool i can't wait to see more. i only had one problem... The door opened suddenly, saying suddenly kind of takes all the suddenness out of ...

Nice start :D Eric Chadsworth is leaning hmm, i think you could replace 'is leaning' with leans. to me it sounds better against the picture window of his study dressed ...

hi i agree with elinor, you need to expand more on this awesome idea. I was like, cool, cool, cool, oh it's over. one line that confused me was... One ...

wow. this was really awesome. it lacked a bit of colourful desrciption and because it's in first person it tended to be too much like 'i did this, i did ...

hi Waterlilygirl throught out this whole piece you keep tense switching. one minute you'd be describing it as though you were looking back to the past and then all of ...

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