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Hey folks... here's the next part. (Don't forget to read the short scenes I posted the other day... otherwise you'll be confused. :wink: ) This'll be it for a while, ...

Thanks a bunch for critiquing everyone! It helps me sooo much. :D (Note: These are just some transition scenes.) ***** Sophie flung her purse down so forcefully that it just ...

Aw, that's such a cute poem! This is just me, but maybe I'd switch around the third and fourth stanzas, just because of the 'summer's at the end of the ...

I liked it. The descriptions were vivid and... that's all I can think of. :D Good work!

omg... Woah. Smilingly? Haha. Since when is smiling an adverb for "to cross"? Well, when you put it like that... :P Guess I should have paid more attention in grammar, ...

Hey folks! Thanks for reading and commenting! It's already making me more conscious of what I write. I edited the original post taking out a few sentences at the beginning ...

Hey there! I enjoyed reading this story. The voice/narrator you have makes it feel more personal. This kind of jumped out at me though... After a while, his teeth began ...

I thought it was good. I know my review isn't as in-depth as the others here... but the way you contrasted the short stanzas after the longer ones really made ...

Hey everyone! Here's my latest attempt (first on this board) at original fiction. I don't really know where the story is heading but I thought it'd be nice to have ...

I ditto the 'wow'! I liked the setup and everything, but the ending seemed a bit rushed. Will there be a part 2?

I liked it. A little more description would be nice... I think your characters and plot are interesting. Can't wait to see more.

Hey there... I'm new. I've been writing mostly stories for quite a few years now and I'm trying to work through some major writers block. Can't wait to get started ...