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Re: Steinbeck
I loved the ending of Grapes of Wrath, I mean most of the poeple i know said it ruined the book because of the cliched symbolism, but i felt the ...
Dec 20, 2006 -
Re: I'm Your Puppet
I liked this, and i dont really like fanfic. but its a good story. Nice job I love the whole style and set up, and well you know about the ...
Dec 20, 2006 -
Re: thank you
I acctually liked the first two stanza i think they help to set up the ending. Your wording seemed kind of shaky in places but i really dont see a ...
Dec 20, 2006 -
Re: Underneath the Sadist dream
OKay second shot at a first impression....I gave up trying to fix the first poem i posted wasn't worth the trouble, yet after that u kinda fell into a hole ...
Dec 20, 2006 -
Re: Nightmares in waking hours
Acctually I'm really sorry about my response I was mad at the time so it came out really well sensitive and bad. Your very right about my style and the ...
Nov 27, 2006 -
Re: Nightmares in waking hours
Thank you for your comment your advice is truly noted. And may i add I'm not in anyway a novice to what your saying, I've been writing for a while ...
Nov 27, 2006 -
Re: breathe in deeply and hold my gaze
I disagree with the last comment or some of it at least, except like the rating and the capital "I". I think the way you wrote it with the dash-outs ...
Nov 26, 2006 -
Re: Nightmares in waking hours
I dont know, it needs work i think but i'm not sure what to do with it. :? I lay my head to rest sleeping can caress my sins away. ...
Nov 26, 2006 -
Re: Unknown
i agree with the above but it seems easy to work with, the wording just needs to be rearranged alittle. Ane possibly a little more emotion on your part. Not ...
Nov 26, 2006 -
Re: New to this but have a read if you want.
I loved this, to be perfectly honest and not sound like i'm just like um how would you say....just saying good things to be nice? maybe. but i really do ...
Nov 26, 2006 -
Re: Beggars and Choosers
I agree with most of the above, and I think it has a okay sense of emotion but a different wording or more description of the girl might add more ...
Nov 26, 2006 -
Re: hello
hi well I'm Elizabeth i'm turning 18 next month :D and well i've ben writing for a while, but i can not spell what so ever that is why spell ...
Nov 25, 2006
