fallenangel

Jaderednalih (Or anyone else that wants to read this), Hi. Thank you for reading my story : ) I'm glad that you were able to relate to it. I'm sorry ...

He’s probably holding her hand right now, I thought numbly as my hand searched the soapy water for the wash cloth, but I don’t care. He was my best friend, ...

Wow thanks so much for the reviews! Sorry about the screw up with the point of views... I tend to get into what I'm writing and forget it's supposed to ...

I guess it's all a matter of opinion. Some readers might grasp that particular point (or hook?) of view better than others... I thought it might be fun to picture ...

I’m a flower. I’m serious. A simple, white daisy. Most people don’t take me seriously. I guess I don’t really blame them; after all, I’m just a flower. And it’s ...

Morning always held a new hope. It was as if the night time had simply erased any terrible event from the previous day; and the rising sun illuminated the life ...

It was within the ancient walls of beautiful Rome they saw each other for the first time. Despite their responsibilities—despite any honor and dedication they had once before found themselves ...

I really liked that. Your rhythm was very good, and perhaps in only a few places you've to problems with flowing... Also I agree with niteowl up there, you need ...

Interesting plot line. I liked it very much. It was very original and captured my attention from beginning to end. I also really liked the way you left the reader ...

Whoa nice ending! Totally caught me offguard. Alright, I think everyone else has basically butchered most of the editing I could do... so I'll just say listen to them. I ...

Wow. That scared me! You successfully portrayed an obsessed freaky stalker murderer. It creeped me out, I keep looking behind my shoulder when I hear something. Thanks a lot. It ...

First of all, I like the idea of how they're meeting in the story, I think it's got potential to be cute and unexpected--I suggest putting more detail in and ...

The fire crackled sharply and cast red shadows across our faces. The heat from the fire only gave warmth to the front of our bodies, so naturally, I was still ...

Oh my. I LOVED IT. To answer the question at the top, my first impression was that they were family related, just from the image of a little boy with ...

Somebody likes the Twilight Series!!! Sorry, but I got a major Twilight vibe reading that, which is okay seeing as I absolutely love the idea of vampires. Try to make ...