fallenangel

The fire crackled sharply and cast red shadows across our faces. The heat from the fire only gave warmth to the front of our bodies, so naturally, I was still ...

Hi. Okay, first of all I was just wondering (you don't have to say if you don't want to) if this is something that actually happened to you. It is ...

Hello! Alrighty, so I don't have much to add to the last reviewer's comments, but I will say I admire your ability to write something a child may connect to. ...

Hello "eviltypewriter" : ) Welcome to YWS! In regards to this piece of writing, I wonder if maybe it belongs somewhere other than Romantic Fiction, however, I don't know where ...

Love is complicated. When you hit that point of realization that you love someone, and will do anything to see them happy—there’s another part of you that hesitates and asks ...

Hello! Okay, I really enjoyed the basic story line of what you have here. You have a lot of strong phrases that capture attention, particularly that last line: "She looked ...

Hello Hailey :) Alright, so first of all, I should let you know that i'm no poem-pro. I enjoy reading it, and I also like to interpret the emotions depicted ...

Hi. Okay, so first of all, I applaud your incredible depiction of emotions (through the dialouge as well as the story) and the powerful impact your descriptions had. I was ...

Hmmm :) Short, sweet, to the point. A great start! This little exerpt is obviously the "happy ending" situation most of us "oooo" and "awww" over (I'm totally a sucker ...

Alarainya, Compliments on the start of a story I'm already hooked on! I really like the idea of how she seems to be dreaming about him. Sometimes the love-at-first-sight can ...

Wow. Thanks so much for all the reviews! For those of you who think it's cliche--or cheesy (put me on a cracker cheesy, thanks ; )) thanks for your opinions ...

Hey everyone! Thank you very much for the suggestions. Sorry about the messy grammar mistakes! It was quick typing and I procrastinate editing obsessively. Peace. -fallenangel

Every day for the past two months, fifteen days, and 31 hours; Wesley Jensen did the same thing at exactly five o’ clock P.M. when he closed down the little ...

This was very creative, your imagination is vivid and capturing! :) There's a lot of truth behind this story--whether it's fiction or something that really happened to you, I can ...

Hey! This was a very interesting piece, I loved how you portrayed something from a boy's perspective. Okay, so this was a little confusing. What's with the 'S' and the ...