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Re: Lust (The First Circle)
Helllooo, Hannah here! Lets jump in, yay! 1.) "Save me? You've condemned me already! YOU MURDERED MY FAMILY." I said, sitting up to scream the last part in his face ...
Jan 24, 2016 -
Re: Carry on my wayward son
Hannah here! :) Helloo! 1.) Woah, hey! "His legs were dangling and kicking as Thomas struggled to keep his breath steady while squirming around trying to get buckled correctly in ...
Jan 22, 2016 -
Re: Cat fight!
Heyo, there! Alright, your story is nice. I've never read one like it. Thanks for the experience. :P 1.) The start is very nice. I like the action - as ...
Jan 21, 2016 -
Re: Slow Dancing, Slow Crashing
Hello, there! This is a well-written story, and it leaves people with a good cliffhanger. *Sigh* A few pointers - Yay! 1.) You seem to /tell/ the reads things rather ...
Jan 21, 2016
