evenstar09

Hey Nariel, Yeah, you're right. That does sound a little weird. I'm sorry it's so short - I just feel bad putting up a crapload of stuff and asking you ...

I haven't posted anything for this story in months, so please bear with me. The world passed me by in a steady kaleidoscope of color – dusty brown mixed with ...

Hey Medusa, These are the only typos I found: She tries to make her eyes solid block, instead of windows. Did you mean "black"? Windows to the soul—isn’t that what ...

Hey Meep, I really liked this piece! If this is your 12/13-year-old standard, that's impressive. Just a few little nitpicks, really. The silky texture of my fur that was once ...

Hey Jasmine! Okay, here's what I thought: 1. Your writing, technically and stylistically, was very good - as usual. I got a clear image in my head while I was ...

Yay! I liked this one even better than the first one. :D My mother’s hair was tied up with a purple scrunchie. She had dyed her hair so many times, ...

This is an addition to my earlier post, "Lost". You might want to read that first, although I suppose it would still make sense if you just read this one. ...

Hey! Evenstar here. He always sounded like he should clear his throat, like there was a frog stuck on the back of his tongue wiggling to get free. Interesting twist ...

Hey! I read your avatar the other day and checked out your portfolio. When I saw you had a Twilight fanfic, I couldn't help checking it out. He opened the ...

Hi. This is post #2. I'd written this a while ago and forgotten I'd had it. Do you think it's worth doing something with? A single iridescent raindrop ran along ...

Hey! While I must agree with miyaviloves' comment on how the narrator is a little immature and the piece somewhat pointless at the moment, I did find this funny. It ...

Hey! I liked this piece a lot. I'm not sure what you changed, but this version works really well. I caught the strong scent of French vanilla and my heart ...

This is my first post. Feel free to rip it apart. :D The last time I saw Elise Westfield, I was walking out to the buses. It was raining fiercely, ...

Hello! Reuben and Olivia covered a lot of what I was going to say, so I'll write what I still can. Overall, it was good. The story was hilarious and ...

Hey. Congrats on your first post! This is my first critique. :D "Always one to gawk at societies ability to consistently pin the blame on one another, and resort to ...