eternallyconfused

Okay. I'm going to be honest. This was extremely hard to read at point. Ive only made it halfway through the second scene. But, i will go ahead and critique ...

This is a great story. My main complaint is that it just ended. There should be more to it. have it last a little longer or something. Maybe several days ...

This is a really great piece. I loved reading it and cannot wait to read more. There was one spelling error: They had met in collage and never drifted apart. ...