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Hello again! This section of the story seemed to have a lot more emotion. Bueno. Everyone else got the nitpicks which makes my job way super easy. Kind of. But ...

You have some spelling/ grammar errors. And I stink at grammar and spelling, so I'm going to let a better person find those and I'll focus on other stuff. Just ...

I'm not usually one to get on people's case about the ratio; but make sure you know its there. For every piece of story you post; you must do two ...

Nitpicks work. They suck but they need to be done Fuck my life, was all that was running though Elsa’s mind on the stormy Sunday afternoon that was her birthday. ...

No, its not a book. But it's a wonderful old woman whos read about a thousand romance novels. And they're all reviewed and rated up on her site. If it ...

I am not the hugest fan of Stephen King... maybe something is horribly awry with my sense of horror, but I haven't been frightened with any of his books yet. ...

I love this book. I'm reading it right now and I want to go out and buy American Psycho posters and hang them on my wall and wear American psycho ...

I had no trouble with this book, so maybe I shouldn't say anything; did you mean you were having trouble with the family members and whatnot? Or the language? The ...

Forever with you? I don't like the title very much; could use a little tough love. But I'm no good at titles, either. Pretty much everything that Evi said was ...

God that was amazing. I understand that it is a synopsis/ character sketch; but I would have liked to see a scene with these two playing out a typical day. ...

That was beautiful. I nearly cried. I was really, really close to bawling but... I got distracted and then the moment was over. Sorry. That was truly magnificant; and really, ...

I like it. Your verbal (and physical) sparring was pretty neat... it takes a special kind of writer to master dialogue like that. The beginning was powerful; and the action ...

This was also really good! I would advise, though, waiting a little longer to put out part two; sometimes you have to let your stories simmer; get a ton of ...

It was beautiful! The best thing I've read of yours! I don't know where this fits in with the rest of your story; if this is part her her past ...

Beautiful. And let me say welcome! Assuming you are new and not a returning member. I loved your story. In my opinion you could use your talent writing stories that ...