emmylou1995

Deliverance Lilian lay on the soft, white bed, holding her newborn daughter, Elexandra. The room around Lilian was simple and white. There sat a plush chair in the corner of ...

I held her lifeless body in a stiff and bloody embrace. The cannons drowned out my mourning cries. I leaned over her face and kissed her cold lips. Such a ...

Oona sat among the tall blades of grass of the bright, green Irish countryside. She looked into the dark gray sky, tears fell down her cold cheeks. Her home is ...

Lier Is A Simple Explanation I stared, unbelievingly at Joseph. I stopped dancing with him. My hands fell to my sides. The music still played around us and people still ...

The moon could be seen through my curtains. The little white table under the window is bathed in moonlight. I watched in growing fear how the moon suddenly became black. ...

The men took hold of my left hand and my waist. One of them grabbed the flaming hot metal burners as the other three held out my right arm. They ...

Prologue I stood in the small, grassy meadow. Tiny orange flowers softly illuminated my vision. The bubbling of a nearby creek filled my ears and the smell of nature penetrated ...

Chapter One The small room is filled with many clothes, costumes, hats, and jewelry. In one corner sits a bureau with make-up scattered on it. Different sized shoes littered the ...

Prologue The savage oak trees loomed eerily over my head. Their scraggly branches lent me no shelter from my own memories, only the wind. My heartbeat quickened as my Mom ...

Chapter One Vibrant colors of orange and red danced in my peripheral vision. Wooden stalls of sweet candies and cloth spanned the courtyard wedged between the castle and cathedral of ...

Chapter Two The entire left wall of Gaendir's study was covered in bookshelves. Upon the bookshelves sat hundreds of old manuscripts and tiny odd bits. The right wall was covered ...

I need to know if this is a good start for a novel. Chapter One The fire had completely burnt out during the night. I woke on my cot, freezing ...

I don't know if this is a good start for a book or not. I just wrote it, its only half a chapter. Hard core reviews are good. Chapter One ...

Chapter OneThe frustration overwhelmed me, leading me to curl my fist and punch the tree beside me. My knuckles split open and blood rushed towards the ground, slowly weaving its ...

Chapter TwoI stood in the field of golden weeds, thin and wispy in the strong morning wind. The sky held fluffy white clouds in its misty blue eternity. I sighed ...

If anyone can help me think of a better name, please do. PrologueMy Moms cherry red hair fell in front of her eyes, their mossy green color shining through the ...

Chapter OneVibrant colors of orange and red danced in my peripheral vision. Wooden stalls of sweet candies and cloth spanned the courtyard wedged between the castle and cathedral of Zosa. ...

Chapter TwoThe entire left wall of Gaendir's study was covered in bookshelves. Upon the bookshelves sat hundreds of old manuscripts and tiny odd bits. The right wall was covered in ...

An Unexpected VisitorThe thin straps of my short blue dress kept slipping from my sweating shoulders. Music pounded loudly in my ears, making my head ring. The room was dark; ...

Chapter Three[i]I sit by the firelight. The flickering arms of the fire reaching out to take hold of me. The walls around me moving along with the shadows. I feel ...

Chapter One, Part One Aralyn leaned against the old oak tree whose gnarled trunk protected her from the icy autumn wind. She closed her eyes, breathing in deeply the scent ...

Chapter One, Part Two Aralyn took the back way to the house, cutting across the meadow behind the village. The five foot high weeds were golden this time of year, ...

She held the child close, wanting desperately to keep it in her arms, but knowing it would never be safe if she did. She stroked the childs cheek, the daughter ...

All the leaves have fallen from their branches. A thousand brown holes peeked through the snow white bark of the birch trees. Several crumpled brown plants rose up against the ...

Somehow, the moon had always looked lonely to Sabora. Up in the sky, nobody to talk to but the stars. All it did, night after night, was watch its precious ...

The school building rose high into the sky. Its gray bricks appeared so dull and lifeless, a humble mass of stone. It was the first day of school, summer gone, ...

Sabora arrived home at four thirty, long after her dad had expected her. She felt horrible about having to stay after school, but there really was nothing she could have ...

I took a step towards the glowering stars overhead, knowing that the farther I wandered, the closer I came to meeting my fate. My heart was quiet, except for the ...

Opening prologue to my fantasy adventure novel.

First half of the first chapter to my book. I'll only post more if people like and read this part. It's long, I'll warn you.

Part two of the first chapter to my novel.

Beginning to a novel.

A young girl begins to realize how the people in her city are mistreated.

A young girl begins to realize that the people in her city are mistreated.

Just wondering if this opening to my novel is a good hook. Does it make you want to read more?

This is the first scene in my novel. I'd like to know if it grabs readers. My novel is structured in scenes, not chapters. Any Commentary is welcome!

I just want to know if this pulls you in. If it were a novel, would you keep reading? If you read it and want to know more about the plot, message me!