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I think your story is great! :) The only error I saw was: The door has large sign on it-you forgot the (a). Keep it up! :D

Thank you. :)

This is only the first three chapters...I will be adding more, just to tell you. :)

I really like this poem. It's very well written, however, you do need commas in some places. Such as, "My bad, I popped it." Other than that, it's very good ...