elephantwalrus

Oops! Sorry! It didn't show up on my computer the first time I read it. Nice, I feel very intelligent now :lol: Sorry about that. Don't mind me...

Wow, this poem is really thought provoking! I was a bit unclear on what it was about at the beginning, but by the end I understood. I usually don't say ...

Is this really lyrical poetry, though? It sounds more like a satire or something. What category would it go under on this website, because most of my poems are whimsical ...

It is a nice metaphor, but I have to agree that it sounds like prose. Keep working on it!

Thanks for the critiques! How does this version sound? Every year, thousands of tourists Flock to ocean With pockets full of money To bathe in gold. The luxurious hours Are ...

the flow of this is really nice; it's a bit awkward at the beginning, but after that, it's as smooth as butter on the head of a bald monkey.