electricbluemonkey

All the pictures of the rose(s) were incredible. The lighting was very well done and the contrast worked. The third picture is too blurry, I can't really tell what it ...

Did it work? EDIT: writersdomain wins

I never was too sure about the classical line, but I just don't wanna say stuff. It sounds too childish. Taking the 'and' out of the 'Hey, ho, let's go' ...

Well, made some changes that you suggested. As I look back, I'm not sure I like it. I'll probably make it longer and change the fourth stanza. It just sounds ...

Well, the nobody really reads the lyrics forum, and I thought I had a better chance of getting it reviewed here. But why should 'All' be in lower-case? It comes ...

Death by over-exposition of adjectives. You don't see that on CSI. And however tempting it is to leave this post to a sole two lines of text, I must actually ...

This is great. Short but sweet. I like how you say things without really saying (no clue how to explain that). I'm not too fond of the ending though, it's ...

This doesn't really...express my wishes or whatever, but it's fairly 'lyrical'. Anyway, this is just a (really dark) piece of progressive rock I wrote today. It's about the government, the ...

that a dead bird in number four?

Well, a post count is a post count.

Them blues are just all just the same, - Was there a reason for the double "just" here? Well, blues singers have a tendency of repeating 'just' in their songs, ...

This could go in Lyrics, but what the hell. A little background on this piece. I was getting tired of all you young'uns choice of music, so I wrote a ...

I was digging though your portfolio and found this piece, with virtually no replies. I think it would work better as flash fiction or prose. Also, the title fits well ...

I'm not sure that repeating 'insanity' in the first stanza helps as much as detracts you from making a point. It sounded like a (mediocre) contemporary heavy metal song. I'm ...

Me gusto mucho! You really like yourself? (It should be gusta, not gusto). Too bad you can't adopt a platypus.