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I need 2 things reviewed. One is the first small bit from my novel that I'm just starting and the other is an poem. Thanks!!

Absolutely amazing!! It made me shudder at the last sentence and gave me goosebumps. Very well done!!

A few minor mistakes, but very very good! There should be their and Im should be I'm other than that it's great!

Oops... Thanks for pointing those out! I'll get to fixing them in my good draft ASAP! Grammar isn't my best subject. Although the 'somethings' are only in there to make ...

Ahhh okay! That started to get me curious as soon as I went to post my first message. :lol: Thanks! umm...can you lock a topic on here?

I've always wanted to visit a different world, or to make an amazing discovery, know some hidden secret, anything. Fantasy and hidden qualities of people have always captured my attention. ...

Grammar used to get me too... I eventually learned by opening up an online dictionary and if I wasn't sure of how to use a word, I'd just look it ...

Wow...really good! I love the 'dark cinderella' and 'evil night' gives it sort of an interesting, earie feel. way to go!

Okay, so I used to play a game called creature breeder. (Hoping to be able to continue on that site in a while!) The forums on the site were layed ...

Okay, so this is the first couple of pages from my latest attempt at a novel. We havn't gotten to the fantasy part yet, but that's pretty much what it ...

I think that I'm a pretty good writer over-all, but I can never think of names or titles! Right now in my novel, I am using the fill in names ...

I inpart agree with The New Hero, try adding a bit more of yourself... It was very good to read though! I enjoyed it and smiled the whole way through ...

That is definately ok! A true poet is able to write from the heart, use emotion rather than logic of layout. I posted a poem that all my friends loved, ...

This is a poem I wrote on the spot. I hope you guys like it! You hold my heart in your hands, how do I keep up with its demands? ...

Thanks guys! :D I'm posting a poem soon!