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NIGHTFALL The dusky sky is turning blacker, Bright stars are coming out. The blueness is fading away, Night brings her fears and doubts. The Sun is a red ball on ...

BATTLE The clanging of swords, The beating of drums, The chanting of men, The killing of hopes. The screams of defiance, The screams of hatred, The screams of agony, The ...

I just wrote this a second ago. I was in a melancholy mood... Any comments? :wink: AT THE WINDOW I sit and glance as the seasons pass, At the window. ...

This is so freaky! I like it though. Just a couple of grammatical points, though neither of them are crucial... You said: [quote]'The face once happy and full of life ...

cheers :D

The Shadow Blight Chapter I - Cricket If you happened to be flying over Wiltshire from Bristol airport, you might see a small cluster of buildings in the middle of ...

same, but what I have read so far is nice... :)

Thanks a lot Snoink, this is really useful advice and I am busy correcting it. :lol:

Hi! My name is Edmund and I am new to this forum. I have posted a couple of things in thefantasy section. Im thirteen and live in the UK. PS ...

I really like the story, but I agree with J.Haux when she says that the punctuation is important. Still really good, and the scene with Tommy entering into the thieves ...

There! Fixed

Dunno what happened... I selected Keep Spaces and nothing happened...

This is really cool, and I agree with the others, dont add any stunts, it could ruin the whole thing. Keep it simple. PS Please review my story The Shadow ...

Chapter V – It begins… Once again, Night shed her dark mantle over the earth, and the Wraith resumed its journey. With the sun safely down, and the moon a ...

Yeah that is a really good name. These are only the first five chapters - I promise plenty more horror!