earendil

Very impressive.. I've never really heard anyone describe the moon in such a way (it is about the moon.. right? :P). Your lines have a good flow, and the rhyme ...

They talk the talk, but they don't walk the walk. I absolutely hate that phrase, but Lord knows it's pretty damn true. I'm Christian, and I agree with a lot ...

I really like the concept of the piece, and the image of the choir calling to the moon. The way you word your sentences was a bit confusing at first, ...

Please excuse me if some of this doesn't make sense. I'm not sure how to exlain some of it. Overall, it's obvious that you're a very skilled writer... and that ...

Overall, I like the piece, though there are definitely some rough spots that need fixing. Your stanzas feel more like short and precise statements; while it's beneficial in that you ...