eaglefire91

Wow. Good job. You have a detailed writing style that flows very well throughout your story and an extensive vocabulary. (So good job for that.) I do have a couple ...

Opps. Sorry, I haven't been on in a while. So I will comment on both of 'em. So first off. Chapter 2. In fact, it was mostly empty. “And how ...

This is a great idea for a story. I think that if you use the advice given by the others, you'll be find. I'm going to save you from another ...

That was very good Amber; I enjoyed reading the portion of it that you had finished. About the title, currently, Meeting Future Girl fits perfectly with it. Because none of ...

Wow! So, reading this I realized you do what I don't do enough! =D That was very good. I've never been able to successfully write foreshadowing, but you do it ...

That was very interesting. I felt as though I was inside the story, and was able to picture what you were describing very well. You also have a wonderful word ...

Wow. Are one of the few words that come to my mind. That is incredible, it was well worded and very interesting. Good job my friend. But, that being said, ...

Wow... (That wasn't depressing at all. =P) That was amazing. I loved how your story just flowed on and on, which made it very easy to read. Your word choices ...

Your story, the Slavation of Earth, I found very interesting. You used great ideas, such as (as noted previously) the sharks and global warming. I also liked the fact that ...