eaglefire91

So... Prepare to be confused! Mauhahaha. Don't worry, it'll all make sense a little later. So, I think that we all know the drill. Critiques and comments are very appreciated. ...

Awesome! Thanks for the reply, I appreciate it. Thoughts are usually expressed in italics. You don't have to do it, but it lets the reader know that it's a thought ...

Wow. Good job. You have a detailed writing style that flows very well throughout your story and an extensive vocabulary. (So good job for that.) I do have a couple ...

I know, I know. I'm late in getting this one out. Sorry about that. I'm going to try and not have that happen again if I can help it. Anyway, ...

Opps. Sorry, I haven't been on in a while. So I will comment on both of 'em. So first off. Chapter 2. In fact, it was mostly empty. “And how ...

...And my chapter gets ripped apart again. Great.. Hahah, I guess that is what I get for putting my story up here... just kidding. Anyway, thank you for the in ...

Okay. This is because of all of your reviews that said I did not have enough detail. (I actually agree with them... but...) Hahah. . As a result, I have ...

This is a great idea for a story. I think that if you use the advice given by the others, you'll be find. I'm going to save you from another ...

All right. I guess I respond to these reviews. First off: It's also a little reminiscent of Star Wars and Battle Star Galactica though. I thought anyway. Well? What did ...

Because the carpet always begs. Why do we ever need to know how to graph a parabola?

They all thought I was crazy, but no, I was not crazy, and crazy I am not, for if I were to be crazy, I would think myself crazy.

Once there was a monster who spoke only about bubble gum. He thought that he should take a lesson about bubbles and rubber bands. He could jump over the river ...

Gifts!

That was very good Amber; I enjoyed reading the portion of it that you had finished. About the title, currently, Meeting Future Girl fits perfectly with it. Because none of ...

Wow! So, reading this I realized you do what I don't do enough! =D That was very good. I've never been able to successfully write foreshadowing, but you do it ...