duringlondon

I like how you were very descriptive, I feel like maybe you could add some more dialogue like more show and not tell. There was also a lot of spelling ...

This story includes many historical elements for sure! I enjoyed all the drama but I have a few suggestions. As I was reading this story I was getting very confused ...

I like the story and it has good detail, but I wonder if you could have more showing and not telling and also, there were a lot of spelling and ...

Ok, I like the story but it seems like in the end you concluded with more tell not show and it seems like you rushed the end because you were ...