duckie

1. I really liked your beginning sentence. It set the scene, the characters, and the mood. 2. I think you need to describe the setting even more. Talk about the ...

So, I haven't read any past sections, but I definitely want to now! I can tell that if I had read what came before, I would love this even more ...

I like this idea. It would be neat to get a background story on it. :} There were a few grammar/punctuation errors. I suggest you just read through it and ...

Well, I have a lot of suggestions, so i'll only give you a few. First off, I can connect with this piece, considering my favorite character of all time is ...

Very interesting story. Rather macabre, but i think that's what you were going for? Anyway. First off, put larger breaks in between paragraphs/dialogue. It is easier to read and follow ...

This is a very intriguing piece. I liked it a lot. Cliffhangers always get ya'. :} I, personally, liked all of the "back and forths." I think they add a ...

First off, I really liked this piece. I like the vagueness it has, and that the only real specific details you give us are about the Magnolia tree. It's like ...

Annoyed, I grabbed my book and took a seat across the room next to Gavin. “What’s wrong?” I turned to the boy sitting next to me. I got really confused ...

The long road had turned to mud. Tall ash trees grew along the edges, in scattered abundance . They leaned over the travellers' path, intimidating and skeletal against the backdrop ...