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My story suddenly took a plot change. I had a dream last night. And there goes the old plot into the trash. OLD: The Light Elf Prince and his servant ...

Thank you to all the critique and compliments! :} I FINALLY edited it all! Hahaha, I hope it's better now! More critique?

Thank you for the critique. I appreciate it. However, I would like to comment on a few things...Back up my reasons, I suppose. the "repeated stops" are there for effect. ...

Section from Prologue (found here ) “You’re the prince!” he exclaimed in surprise. The young royal grinned proudly, and straightened his posture slightly. “I am. Why are your eyes so ...

"Death. I've come so close to dying so many times, I feel like I've become kind of indifferent to it. But I will not let them kill me. I will ...

"Dude. You so need to change that message machine. Anyway, it's Brogan. Call me back, I got a question about some stuff for school...Dude, a really hot chick just walked ...

"Of course. Everything we see is real." -Leo "No, it's not. Leo isn't real." -Pier. "I am too." -Leo "No, you aren't." -Pier. "I am!" -Leo. "Think what you want.......See, ...

(Pretty close! Except he isn't British...But he is adorable!) A jackass who doesn't know how to keep a friendship and is awkward and likes too many girls who will never ...

A dark haired woman with a deep, husky voice. From sometime back in the 20's. She is high class and attends parties regularly, and is very sarcastic and logical. Owen ...

1. I really liked your beginning sentence. It set the scene, the characters, and the mood. 2. I think you need to describe the setting even more. Talk about the ...

Quinton's Dragon : A story about a little boy who is afraid to grow up, and so takes refuge in his fantasies and dreams that eventually bring him to a ...

granted, but the sun evaporated all the water from the pools and lakes and oceans and such. I wish I could find my nail clippers.

So, I haven't read any past sections, but I definitely want to now! I can tell that if I had read what came before, I would love this even more ...

"Food." -Leo Bitter, sweet, or spicy?

"Good question. Wherever it is, I think they made a few mistakes while conceiving me." -Leo "I am from Gallath in Elyrian. I'm the prince!" -Pierkin "Uhm, I come from ...