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  • Lyric Poetry Re: Sorry

    Sorry that I’m not perfect, Because we all know you are; All alone in your own special world, Where only the fantastic star. And I know how hard it must ...

    Sep 5, 2011
  • Other Poetry Re: Depressed- why try?

    Hello there! I have a couple little nitpicks here for you. Life is a miracle. But its also shit. You can try hard as hell to be and do your ...

    Jun 26, 2011
  • Other Poetry Re: Here Is My Message

    Hello there! I have just a little nitpick for you I hate going down the street and seeing an abandoned animals just sitting there shaking with fear That should either ...

    Jun 26, 2011
  • Dramatic Poetry Re: I Jumped

    This just sort of came to me not too long ago and I wrote out another version as a short story, which I'll post later. In the meantime, any critiques, ...

    Jun 25, 2011
  • Other Poetry Re: Still Me

    Hello there! Just two quick little things. First, as the reviewer before me said "ain't" isn't a word. I feel that "isn't" might be a better word. Second, the flow ...

    Jun 25, 2011
  • Lyric Poetry Re: The Burglar

    Hello, I have just a few quick nitpicks. It's me Who like a burglar Leaves your house Covered in The velvety softness Of an early morning And the lingering smell ...

    Jun 25, 2011
  • Lyric Poetry Re: Could You?

    If I told you today, exactly how I felt, Could you dare to say the same back? Could you hold me, forever, under the stars, Just as I’ve always wanted? ...

    May 21, 2011
  • Other Poetry Re: Popularity

    Wow. This is a very strongly worded poem. I have a couple corrections though: You can be such a bitch And you know it You don't really give a shit ...

    May 21, 2011
  • Other Poetry Re: I Will

    Fine for a minute, Pushed down again. Slightly better for an hour, Knocked back again. Happy for a day, And slammed to the floor. But to just be myself, I ...

    May 10, 2011
  • Dramatic Poetry Re: Senseless

    Hi! All I have to say is what a beautiful poem. I thought that it flowed nicely and they rhymes were pretty good. Thanks for explaining him getting cut off ...

    May 1, 2011
  • Other Poetry Re: Only You

    My friend wrote this and asked me to post it so, here it is. I was looking for a friend and not just anyone would do, When my eyes stopped ...

    Apr 27, 2011
  • Dramatic Poetry Re: I Don't Want to Hide

    I'm not sure if this is any good yet so please comment and let me know. I appreciate all criticism. Thank you! I don’t want to hide. It hurts my ...

    Apr 27, 2011
  • Other Poetry Re: Light the Torches

    Hi! So I really enjoyed the poem and what it's communicating. However, I can't interpret if your use of "lite" instead of "light" is intentional? If so, why is it ...

    Apr 26, 2011
  • Other Poetry Re: spinning spinning pot

    Hi, so I really liked the poem, only problem for me was the spelling errors and the flow of the rhyme was a little off. Spin spin the potters hand ...

    Apr 24, 2011
  • Other Poetry Re: Slight Smiles

    I must agree that the repetition is well done. The one thing that didn't work for me was the stanza- Slight smiles Hide the read reason. Yet they give off ...

    Apr 24, 2011


here is the deepest secret nobody knows (here is the root of the root and the bud of the bud and the sky of the sky of a tree called life; which grows higher than the soul can home or mind can hide) and this is the wonder that's keeping the stars apart i carry your heart (i carry it in my heart)
— e.e. cummings