dreamintechnicolour

I like it. I think the last lines are nice how they tie it all together, not out of place at all...But i'm not really an expert on poetry... And ...

In spite of myself, I actually quite like this.. Just a couple of fix ups: When my mom says a few more hours (which she already said hours ago) she ...

Beep, Time ticks with new found uncertainty, Once confident in seconds to minutes to hours, In hours to days to weeks, Now nothing steadies it’s passing. Beep, Too late for ...

Love it! The only constructive things I accumulated to say have already been said...Hmm.. I guess all I'd say is It was worth it to be skinny if it meant ...

Ah, I absolutely love it! :D Just a couple of minor word things; But I can’t help but pity If it was me I would write "Now I can’t help ...

Could you critique my short story Grace Under Pressure for me? I've come to a toal dead end with the editing of it. Basically I just need someone to either ...

Would you please consider critiquing my story Grace Under Pressure? It needs serious ripping apart but I've stort of come to a dead end with how to edit it further... ...

Grace under pressure, Cooling palm across my brow, Eyes of an angel, Lay me down She picked up the gun; its cool grey metal fitted perfectly into her hand. As ...

First story/novel: ok, so my first story was on my first day of school. It pretty much said that my cat eats catfood (or something of the sort) and pretty ...

I liked this, it's easy to read which is always a good thing to achieve when you're writing from the perspective of crazy people (they have a tendency to be ...

I really enjoyed this. It's nice to take a break from the tense, high action plots which everyone seems to think equates to "good writing". Only minor errors (mostly just ...

I really enjoyed this, right from the start I felt like I was in the room with Mr Thimble. the imagery was sharp and focussed, which made it easy to ...

Hello all! I'm Ash, I've been writing for about two years (on and off), I have serious writers block issues (I call my writer's block Steve...he and I spend lots ...