dragonfphoenix

Thanks! Bundling all the responses into this one, there's a lot of minor prose housekeeping that'll need to be done once the story is finished. Part of what's slowed me ...

Yeah, the prose will get a lot more attention during revision. On your last note, though, tack is the correct word: 'tack' [noun 3] a method of dealing with a ...

Thanks for the feedback! Yeah, prose has been kinda meh for a while now, hit a point where it's been a struggle to write stuff (off and on for a ...

Hmm, I'll have to double check the original ambrosia scene and make sure those details are correct and actually included and not just, in my brain but not on the ...

Haha yeah I totally don't have to go back over some future sections because I also forgot details about a certain someone from the previous chapter that needs to be ...

I can probably go back over the training description, but it's a combination of "Hasda has super strength" and Charax isn't trying super hard coupled with sometimes Charax uses 'training' ...

Well, I got two notifications from this single reply so we should probably keep it lol

A little sick still and responding to both here, this is the third and final Trial. Typos etc. Alliteration is my favorite lol. And yeah, there are a lot of ...

YWS hiccuped while I was trying to publish this, and I can't delete this comment so here's a fun comment for posterity

No worries, glad you're back! Haha, you picked a good stopping point. Thanks, glad you've been enjoying the story :)

I'll see if the tone needs adjusting during editing. Their convo here was meant to handle a few things. It's setting up for next chapter, seeding future events, and developing ...

So, thing I'll clean up in the revision, the oglelovs are mortal creatures, so them ambushing Charax is them swinging way above their paygrade. They are going to show up ...

Thanks! Ynyr is Welsh, so the best pronunciation I found was "AH-near", although I've been saying it like "yih-NEAR". I could probably rework that section to have a "Yes, Ynyr," ...

Thanks! Ynyr is Welsh, so the best pronunciation I found was "AH-near", although I've been saying it like "yih-NEAR". I could probably rework that section to have a "Yes, Ynyr," ...

So, reading through this I can see places where I can add tiny nudges to clarify things during revision. Basically, the oglelovs are mortal creatures, so when they're attacking Charax, ...