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Erhem. Far too much HP support on this thread in my opinion, because Lord of the Rings (as Literature with the dreaded capital L) is vastly superior. Vastly, vastly, vastly. ...

As this is the first draft there are lots of spelling/grammar/sentence structure problems, but I'll ignore those and let you sort them out. Your writing, first of all, is certainly ...

Okay... First of all, there is just way too much passive exposition. The key to writing any piece in a made up world/future is to slowly expose the details of ...

First, to address just a few grammar/syntax/diction/style nit-picky details: The austerely dressed young woman This is just me, but I think the words 'simply' or 'plainly' fit better than austerely, ...

I read Lolita a few years ago, but it's stuck with me for a while. Definately one of my favourites. I remember I especially found Humbert's rivalry with the other ...

As you painfully established, I am no poet. (I'm actually one of those dreaded commercial fiction authors.) But after you bashed me - and a deserved bashing it was - ...

Seeing as you asked nicely, here's my crit. First of all, I have to say bravo - and this is not a sarcastic bravo. It's rare for me to find ...

I'll admit, I was only able to read chapter 1 - as I have some studying to do soon - but if you'll allow me to offer a few pieces ...