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Those damned commas with the names elude me every time. Much thanks Shafter, though the version I have posted here is still an older one. (redrafted the whole damn book ...

Okay, so I just finished reading Irrational Man by William Barrett and about a month before that Dostoevsky's The Idiot. Irrational Man is non-fiction, if you didn't know, but I ...

Erhem. Far too much HP support on this thread in my opinion, because Lord of the Rings (as Literature with the dreaded capital L) is vastly superior. Vastly, vastly, vastly. ...

As this is the first draft there are lots of spelling/grammar/sentence structure problems, but I'll ignore those and let you sort them out. Your writing, first of all, is certainly ...

Snoink, the general questions you ask are all relevant, because they are all things that will be revealed later in the story. You'll learn some more about the man, about ...

(GE is undergoing an overhaul, so these two installments are now gone. But the prologue has been overhauled, so check that out if you want.)

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Thanks for the crits. The explanation for why orphan Alec is named after the prologue Alec comes in 2 chapters I believe it was. I elaborated a bit in my ...

Okay... First of all, there is just way too much passive exposition. The key to writing any piece in a made up world/future is to slowly expose the details of ...

Made a few changes. The baby being referred to as an 'it' was intentional... Maggie coming to terms with it's 'personhood', realizing the 'thing' is not just another 'problem' but ...

First, to address just a few grammar/syntax/diction/style nit-picky details: The austerely dressed young woman This is just me, but I think the words 'simply' or 'plainly' fit better than austerely, ...

I read Lolita a few years ago, but it's stuck with me for a while. Definately one of my favourites. I remember I especially found Humbert's rivalry with the other ...

As you painfully established, I am no poet. (I'm actually one of those dreaded commercial fiction authors.) But after you bashed me - and a deserved bashing it was - ...

Well, seeing as I joined yesterday, that's an easy one: Writer's Digest. I love that magazine - not literally mind you. Oh God/s/dess/mysterious-higher-powers... That really lends itself to interpreta

Seeing as you asked nicely, here's my crit. First of all, I have to say bravo - and this is not a sarcastic bravo. It's rare for me to find ...