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This is such a gorgeous piece. Your descriptions are very well written, and your comparisons are envious, I really wish I could write like that. :) I love the sad ...

Sorry this took me an age to read :D So, this is quite the interesting story you have started. The idea is great. Every one can relate to it. The ...

Loving this!! I like Charlie, she's a really interesting person. you've created quite the complex character here, the girl who wants love but in a sense can't give it. Amazing. ...

Hello dearie, Terribly sorry I didn't get to this sooner! It was amazing!!!! Mario is adorable, but Connor seems so hot, i don't know who she should choose!! :D And ...

You did it again! It's simply wonderful. Certainromances took care of the editing part, so I'm going to focus on the content. You had a nice balance of humor in ...

Dear Hopefulromantic, So this had a good storyline but some things could be tweaked. Laying here on the ground, cold, in pain, alone, and surrounded by his dead friend, but ...

hey! Oh man! She's pregnant! You had great descriptions, and made the characteristics of Gabe and Em really come out, showing that Gabe is usually very cautious and Em is ...

Hey. Sorry this took me long to post! But it's simply fabulous. Loving the drama with her being pregnant and the love triangle of Gabe, Mario and Connor. You switched ...

Hey Cynara, Thanks for telling me about the new chapter! It's very good, just a couple things... I look down at myself to saw that I was wrap-up in a ...

Hey, Cynara, You have a very interesting story going on here. I just caught a few things that could be tweaked: “Gabe calm down. I bet she’s fine and having ...

Mechi! This was Fabulous! The emotion was played out perfectly, I could feel Mick's sadness covered up by happiness. I like how you made Mick stay friends with Pete even ...

Hey, I liked this, I just saw a couple little things "He's bleeding! Move, get an OR open!" My ears could hear everything that went on around me, but all ...

Hey, This was sick- in the good sense of the word. It reminded me a lot of Lullaby by The Cure. I loved how you made the character hear the ...

Hey Mechi, This is interesting. It's good for a started chapter. I actually like the nonchalance of the title "Another Teen Pregnancy Story" It's laid-back, much like your style of ...

heyy, This is good. The action is fast, but not too fast that the reader can't keep up, just fast enough that it keeps the reader's attention. The emotion is ...