dmungrrl

Excellent! I know other people said you should explain what a mage was at some point at the beginning, and that would be a good idea, but I got the ...

Thanks for all your critiques. =) I know the beginning could use some work. Thanks you for your ideas, anything to help me to improve my writing.

So I'm am currently writing a fantasy book series, The Chronicles of Maridemore about this Irish kid named Will O'Shaughnessy (yay for family names!) If you go to my website ...

The details of this are really beautiful. It does evoke a lot of emotion and the reader can really feel the pain of the character being narrated. I like the ...

Full Title: Lying is the Most Fun a Girl Can Have... Type: short story Part: 1/6 Rating: 15+; language, suggestive situations The first part is probably the raciest, but I ...

I love the way you describe the water at the opening of this piece. The detail you go into is beautiful and I liked that you included details about all ...

Coffee! Any day of the week. Occasionally I like orange juice, but our orange juice is my dad's so I can only drink it when he's out of town.

Thank you for your advice! I'm always looking for ways to improve my writing, your comments are appreciated!

Oh, okay. TVs and noise ordinances? Then all is well! I'd be interested in reading your bigger piece, I really like your writing style. =D

First off, I love your names! They are all so cute and creative and fun! They give each character a sense of individuality and I really like that. Secondly... Daymore ...

I like this, it's a good start. The only comment I have is that it is a little choppy. I think a few more details to do a little more ...

This is my first post on YWS... so please be kind if I didn't do it right! Anyway... This is one of my oldest stories and this is the second ...

I think you should post more of this, since I am intrigued and would love to know what happens next! I think you have a unique style of writing that ...

This is very well written! You're a talented writer. I like the story you've presented here, it's a very good read! One thing I would suggest doing would be to ...