desmerize1819

Hey, Shayna, I loved your story. Your protagonist and the possible antagonist are really mysterious. Though well written, there's a few mistakes, but you don't need me to point them ...

Dangerous Type He was in the throes of sleep. But then he heard a noise. He sprang up like a jack-in-the box, only he wasn’t in a box, but in ...

Hello, dreamer, welcome. Whoa. I got goose bumps reading your peice for some reason. I like. It speaks true. What's funny is that there's no one who has never been ...

Hey, faithlessfate, welcome. I'm Des. I like your poem and I see thet you have potential. Sometimes you can punctuate your entire poem or half or you can choose not ...

Oops. I meant Timeless.

Hey, June, it's Desmerize. I liked this. In the fourth line though, you have the word "and" before " A silent lull..." and I think it slows it down a ...

Hey, thank you June. What's so crazy is that i saw the mistakes after they were posted. Once again thank you for your comments.

Empty I am empty inside. My soul’s a void which needs to be filled. I long for everything: to feel your comforting touch, to hear your voice whisper my name. ...

Right or Wrong You tell me you need me. You sak me for advice and when i do just that, you turn around and you reprimand me For what? I ...

Spark. I like it. It's really nice. For a moment i had experienced that funny feeling in my chest and stomach which only can be my emotional response to your ...

There's a grammatical error in the last paragraph. 'Because 'It's' sink or swim'-correction.

This is Totally Wonderful! 'You're the lifeline I don't need'. Sometimes i feel that way: that i don't need a saviour. The frustration is something to which I can relate. ...

I'd really like to get some comments.

I'd love to get your comments Vice She wakes up and for a moment she thinks she’s in her room With it’s peach-coloured walls and cozy comfort But the blur ...

Really not bad. i think that a period should have gone at hte end of the first sentence. in the second line you made an error. Correction:'I also heard "They" ...