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Let me pass on by Don’t look at me. Don’t trail your eyes down my body and bring them to rest upon my chest. Don’t wet your horrid lips and ...

Hey there Madel,I'm des. :D Your poem was alright. But I do have to agree with yrclever, it is cliche. At first I thought you were posting Hillary Duff's song ...

(Darn these abstract words! Everyday I have new feelings about them. Do you?) Conceptual Feeling Hope is scattered white dust from crushed bones. Loneliness is that body in the river ...

Hey,Writing, I'm des. This has potential, but you need to work on it a bit. You should--as foxfire stated--use more description and really show the readers what's going on. You ...

Hey, Nalyd. I like that name: Nalyd :) . It rolls of the tongue nicely. By chance, is it ''Dylan'' spelled backwards? Anyway enough of that. I liked your poem. ...

The third one is REALLY funny--for real! :D Ok... so... five minutes have gone by and I'm still laughing! I lied. Five minutes did not go by. But hey, it's ...

Hey,Monument, I'm des. This piece was good! The idea or concept of your poem is understandable. But to me--in some cases-- it was a bit loose. In the first line ...

Hey, karibbeandiva, I like the concept of your poem but it needs a bit of work. So i'm going to critique it for you. I'll do my best.( But don't ...

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A Red Rose A red rose retrieved with thorns that spite, releases a sliver of vitality unto the sheets of white freedom. The thumbprint of tainted happiness within, fades into ...

Hey, Ocean_soul, excellent poem! Your rhyming was alright, although the second line in the second stanza seemed crowded. It truly is cute...I mean sweet...no, I mean lovely--Wait, I mean, it ...

Hello,PoeticGlow, I'm Des. Your poem was good. It gives readers a clear understanding of the enticing, temptation and indulges of cocaine. Does the part with "...the sweat runs down your ...

Hey, cluless, your poem sure does contradict your name. Your piece was good, but I can't say that it was excellent. I may be wrong, but I think it would ...

I also enjoyed this. It was short and sweet. I liked the slow pace which gave the readers time to absorb it.And the imagery and symbolism were used well. Loved ...

I also liked your peice, Myrcei. There's a sadness with which any human could relate. I enjoyed it, and besides a few mistakes ,it was indeed well written. Do what ...