demib

Hello! man that is good i really couldnt stop. a lot of people have trouble tryin to get a flow goin for this kind of stuff! i love the description ...

Hello! So your first paragraph was great. brilliant description. but right when you got to the point of talking its was just terrible. there is no expression in your words ...

Love your description yes absolutely. Good grammar good signals a nice flow to the paragraphs. Metaphors and similes are good to use just dont use it often. work on making ...

The poem gives youre veiw of emotions, which is good but it comes to a piont that people are muddled and then get back on track. It will help that ...

that is a very good thing. at the end you actaully expressed that he was actaully a relative when he was 22 and she is 15. one of the things ...