deltadalek

Thanks, I really appreciate your help! About the vultrinos being too emotive, the later installments will explain that part. And knowing his name? Well, I hoped the ESP would explain ...

WOW! That is a good start, I was disappointed that it had to end! I don't want to be critical, but I noticed an error. I was glad it wasn’t ...

Yeah, I was not really confident in my work. I am still a rookie, and I don't yet know all the tricks. Thanks! And don't worry, you didn't put me ...

Thanks for the advice! The only problem I couldn't bring myself to fix was the one about the entire giving away the secret thing. I......... :shock: Well, I think that ...

This was good! I like the characters, and how things went. I can't really find any error that was not previously mentioned. I wish I could help :smt001 ! Maybe ...

WOW. This was an amazing read! It had good characters, and a good plot twist. I thought the woman was thinking about the man who was going to break up ...

The Lost Star System part 3 We know pick up with our heroes, as they are preparing for the harsh life in store for them. * * * Greg ran ...

It's good! I just went to public school (don't ask), and it really catches the mood and train of thought is usually there! I only noticed a few grammar errors, ...

It was supposed to be a short history on love, right? It's JUST FINE, but a little hard to understand :? .

I enjoyed it too! And I know what you mean about the "turning into novels" bit. Whenever I try writing a story :smt024 , I go overboard with detail and ...

Thanks again. I think that it is not as exciting, but thank you for proving otherwise :D :D

Thanks! I am a new writer and I appreciate any help! :P

A VERY GOOD READ! I think it is kind of in the style of Steven King's "The Shining," and I enjoyed that style except for the SCARE YOUR PANTS OFF ...

The Lost Star System Part 2 We return to The Lord vultrino, who is absolutely furious about the computer chip being stolen. And to his reverie... * * * “You ...

A really good read! You brought new light to the story, and I couldn't really find anything that disrupts that flow mentioned in the previous post. The way you described ...