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Re: A Smile, a Blonde, and a Homecoming Dance
I enjoyed this story quite a lot. There were a few mistakes, like keeping the word 'fun' out of a sentence. I also wish you had elaborated on the characters' ...
Apr 11, 2008 -
Re: Johnny
Well, there were only a few things I personally noticed. There were a couple of run-on sentences that you might want to use semicolons for. There were a few capitalization ...
Apr 8, 2008 -
Re: We All Fall Down (Part 1 of 2)
I really enjoyed this piece. A couple of the metaphors, like the one involving the violins, were a bit... out of place. Also, in the sentence "And she pulled the ...
Apr 8, 2008