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Haha :P So, October girl, you're suggesting I post it in halves? Xxx Do

Thanks for commenting! I'll work on my spelling, etc, mistakes as soon as I get the time to edit this story :D XxxDo

Thank you for the comment, and for the compliment :D I appreciate the suggestion about the Old Testament, but I'm not religious, and can hardly be called Agnostic, even, so ...

Thank you for the comment!! Good advice, thank you I'll consider changing "babe" into something else, because it is in no way meant to sound fake! Thanks for pointing it ...

Thanks for the comment ! I'll work on the tense thing, the typos, and the pace of the story :D appreciate the advice !! XxxDo

Thank you for your comment :D I appreciate the advice, I'll work on my essay to include more logos and less pathos. I love the way you put that :wink: ...

Thanks a lot for the comments!!! You guys are awesome! :smt023 *Huggles* XxxDo

Cause your downloading doesn't work *shame on your computer :wink: * here's the rest of the comments: It's not a lot, I know, but that's because the story was good, ...

Thank you a lot for your comments :D I'm going to edit it when I have the time, which will be after I mow my backyard.... stupid chores XD Anyway, ...

Thank you for your comments !! I'm glad you liked the story :D And yea, he definetly deserved to get punched :wink: I'll tone the description down a notch when ...

Thank you ! You've made some excellent points. *slaps forehead in a how-could-i-miss-that way* . I'll get editing :wink: XxxDo

Thank you ! I'm so glad you enjoyed the story :D It's always great to hear people say that! I've changed to using the proper dialogue marks in my later ...

Something about the short words and sentences appeals to me. I like it, though I can't fully explain what it is that draws me in. I think the simplicity makes ...

I LOVED it :D Yea I do realize I've said that about 500 times since I read part one, but thats because the stories are simply awesome :D Hope the ...

Oh, and let me know if you edit it, I'd love to critique it again!! Are you serious about the left-handed thing? Whoa the world is more disturbed than I ...