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Everyone is touching on the right points, often for the wrong reasons. So let me touch on aspects of what it is and what some of the affects are. We ...

Its not a story, it lacks all the development and beauty of one, and cuts off at the end of the scene. :) Its a tiny piece I put up ...

(Small piece of the story posted for Lind. Any others please give tips. Graphic detail warning though! I am well aware of the comma errors and a few grammar spots. ...

(Nudity warning! This chapter is rated R for brief bad moments. Enjoy!) Nightfall came swiftly as the setting sun disappeared behind the giant forge known as the Metalworks. Its shadow ...

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(Author's note. This is for NaNo, it is just a first draft so it is by no means perfect and there is probably a lot wrong with it. I gave ...

Yes its my first year doing it. So I was not really prepared. I wish I could start writing now, but even then I will not be able to actually ...

Interesting, but still too fast paced for me. You really neglected Edea's appearance the significant role of Caraway in this chapter. Once again Tylor stole the spotlight and cast negative ...

A bit awkward and Tylor is becoming increasingly suspicious. To the point of that everyone is screaming, "Who or what is Tylor?" These things, especially to Quistis would have quickly ...

Interesting, but the fact Tylor's cover was not blown at seeing the headmaster was a bit awkward. Quistis is not the only smart one in the bunch, even a nitwit ...

Really short, and I am a bit confused at to what's going on. Perhaps you give some more detail about Seifer's excution and everything that took place. Also the Garden ...

I scrapped mine. Back to 0. ;-; I really need to find a new idea. I've been tinkering with a fanfic of mine that is about ff11. I just wonder ...

I wouldn't say anything 'dragon' is cliche. I've written stories about dragoons that have lots of detail and originality in them. I personally take many shots at those people who ...

Never use adjectives before said, but feel free to spice up your 'said's as with the mood. yelled barked whimpered gasped roared cried giggled laughed whispered shouted All of each ...

They very strongly by subject and novels are meant to be fully developed stories that are drawn out and make the reader empathize or identify with the characters through many ...