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Author's note: Story-time boys and girls. This is the oldest and most complete work I've ever done, so rather then cramming this 25 page chapter down your throat I've decided ...

1. Return to nothingness. A desire for that is unforgivable. This is an affront to not only anything in existence, but any higher power. Suicide is up there with it, ...

Chapter 1 The Coming Sota was sitting on his bed studying. > Weak opening. Never use the name to open. >> Description of the room (the setting) comes prior to ...

If this is the new still lacks everything and ios not really a chapter or an introduction. It doesn't even catch the readers interest. Always telling vague oddities that anyone ...

Victoria Pencharmer (Birth name: Rushi Sunia) 1. Who do they associate with? - 1st part of the story: Avalon (future lover), Bruno (Guardian) 2nd part of the story: Avalon (now ...

I definitely don't think I'll be reading that story anytime soon, Errant. But I must say that they sound like you've put tons of work and blood (a lot, it ...

Sounds like a comedy on FOX or WB. Not something like Family Guy's comedy, but rather a humorous events of trying to raise a kid. Here's mine: Blood Lily.

Eric thanks, I have the rough drafts of both of those. Gaia is up past chapter 780 now in terms of story line (I'll split it later...) and Lost Sorcerer's ...

I really like the Niat story. Have you posted it yet, because I'd really like to read it. It sounds interesting and filled with action and adventure. Tathan sounds Sci-Fi, ...

Chapter 3 - Bluebells Departure and Vince’s Temptation Vince awoke in the morning to find Bluebell sleeping soundlessly next to him. He reached out and pulled back her fine hair ...

Thank you and btw, mods exist for full nudity without the armor on. The different part was the lack of bringing people into mog house, which is now going to ...

Unrealistic and a bit awkward. Wrong names and very stale. Not getting the warcraft reference or any in jokes, I think that this is rather...plain. The story flows pretty well ...

These are my main stories and the ones I am most proud of. Still looking for people to critique them or find some interest in them: Current project - Blood ...

Its called... type all day and work all day...then sleep very very little. :P

54k words. Last bit. Done. :D