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Having current difficulties with this particular subject, your title forced me to open this piece immediately. Following it was easy, appears to portray hope. We all love to hope. However, ...

This needs some work. You are all over the place with your words, phrases, grammer, punctuation and techniques. I kindaza got a headache after reading it. PET PEEVE ONLY> Get ...

I kindaza like. kindaza not. I see what your trying to do, trying to accomplish, and its pretty cool. needs a bit of work. Add another verse, talk about how ...

Not sure if there is a sexual or insominatic undertone here. Perhaps more of a repetition for in&out of the bedsheets could make it more sexual. Also, last line of ...

I am the LAST person you would need to make an excuse for. Its all good. Perhaps I should have asked a question instead: "Why does Ky jump at me ...