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I peer down at the girl in the green coat and criticize her in my mind. She's taken several strands of her hair and has made the poor decision to ...

Hi, DarknessSurroundsMe! Welcome to YWS. I remember when I first joined, I felt good when I posted my first piece of writing and got a cheery little welcome. So, here's ...

Hi, thanks for reviewing my poem! I originally wrote this because I actually did eat a grapefruit that day and felt like devoting something to its amazing tastee

My Spin on Grapefruit I just enjoyed a rather round, juicy fruit It goes by the name of grapefruit Stickiness isn't the only problem you will come across This is ...

It is a true story, to answer your indirect question. It's an account of my 13th b-day. I hope you enjoy the gift I sent you for reviewing my work. ...

Hi there! I have a few suggestions/questions, so here they are: 1.) Was this meant to be a rant? Because if it was, then the topic-jumping would be appropriate. Rants ...

Hi there! I have a few suggestions. 1.) There are a few spelling errors, so it might be a good idea to run through your poem real quick. 2.) If ...

Thanks. And yeah, more than half of the story takes place in the school. But I'm glad you liked it. I didn't exactly write it to relate to anybody, I ...

To the writers out there who actually care about the topic I put my stories in: In my last story, "A Boundless Friendship", people kept bugging me about how it ...

Unique poem. Straight to the point. Expresses your point of view, Doesn't push your opinion Some poets do that The only thing I would suggest is... Why not convert this ...

Strangly enough, when people are negative, their writing is more interesting. At least yours is. I wouldn't really change anything about it. It's simple but it doesn't need to get ...

Hi, this was very uplifting. loved it. the poem, the rhyming, the imagery it brought on, everything. stupendous! who says poems have to be all fancy and deep? yours had ...

Hi there! :) Your story was one of those deep, soulful ones. I liked it. I don't know if you're going to make something more of it, but if you ...

Sidenote to the reader: This account is based on an actual experience in my life. This is a re-cap of a...reflective moment I had while thinking of one of my ...

Good bit of writing you have here. The scenario you laid down in your story encouraged visualization because of the strong descriptions. Excellent job on that. I was a bit ...