davidechoe13

i don't know a lot about poetry stuff but that was really good i enjoyed it a lot :)

Sounds interesting i'm curious as to see how the rest plays out

It's a good story but it needs to be longer it could be made into a very suspenseful mystery novel. the shortness of it doesn't do the story justice.

I thought it sounded really interesting. One of the few that i have tried to read and review and actually finished. Great job!!

real good i thought it was decent, overall good. few spelling errors and stuff but that was really all i saw wrong with it i thought the story was good ...

very good for a first chapter maybe slow down a little. Describe whats going on. describe what the character looks like. all in all i thought it was pretty good.