davidechoe13

It was a good story but it really in the end was kinda (not tryin to be discouraging or anything) but it was really just kind of dumb, though i ...

Like the idea, the character names are a little far fetched if not too hard to read, kind of a dull ending. You might wanna try describing the area around ...

i thought it was good. sounds interesting. some grammar problem's i noticed if you proof read it, it might help. If your gonna go for a cliffhanger or whatever, if ...