darko.demark666

The deepest ocean; The clearest sky. A soaring eagle flying high. Or : The deepest ocean and the clearest sky, a soaring eagle who is flying high. Faded denim trudging ...

Two lovers Hearts burning, Ever dancing You'll need to correct the punctuation here. I'd put a dash in the end of the first verse. And also the same in the ...

melancholy fire like an icy claw clawing at the heart, . Red alert!!! Repetition doesn't work or fit or anything. Little advice: repetition is very hard to pull of so ...

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Hi, I just stopped by to say few things about your poem. :D It is red- red as the early moon, swathed in brilliant rubies, rising just at noon- It ...

Be serious.

Hello, I'm Casper and I'll review your work NOW!!! ;) Seriously, why did you put all those "whistlings" here? It makes the poem boring as hell. All this is so ...

Well..you want it, you've got it-review this. (Not only review, tear it to pieces :) )

Blue eyes searching A s a tear rolls down. Watch the caps. Caps, not cops :lol: You say it helps you, Clears your head , But all I see is ...

---Oh, good and bad are not equal. If they were they would both be called "good" or both "evil". I meant to say that evil aren't just evil. Even crooks ...

*bowing*

Lousy crook or a nun? For me it's almost the same. Holy Bible or a gun? Another wicked game. Tired of living shame, tired of malicious rove, taking guilt and ...

Trains just come and go: they are leaving no mark, they are leaving no stains, trains follow the dark. And their road is fake: if they break that cage great ...

When a voilent wave, I'll just show you that and you decide if it was a mistake or not. Was my tears, This should be "were my tears" or "was ...

Wrong section-poems don't have choruses. Well, most of them don't. These are lyrics for a song, definitely.